Thursday, August 27, 2009

Lions and tigers and ambiguous language: oh my!

I changed my blog tag line to:

Stories from a Californian who finds herself loving life in Virginia while attempting to mind her own business, a surprisingly difficult task.

The speech language pathologist in me is concerned about ambiguous language. Is it clear that the task that is difficult is minding my own business rather than loving life in Virginia? Loving life in VA comes easily. Minding my own business has become a bit more daunting.

7 comments:

Stefani M. said...

What was it about the last one that was a problem?

Brent said...

My first interpretation of the subtitle was that it referred to the fact that it's hard to mind your own business in Virginia, but when I read your post I realized that it's not just in Virginia that it is difficult to mind one's own business.

Jocelyn said...

The old tag line was WAY too wordy. In fact, I just took my first post and made it my tag paragraph. I needed something more succinct and current.

Marydalene said...

Grammatically, you're sentence is correct. The "a surprisingly difficult task" modifies the last object in your sentence, "minding her own business," not loving life in Virginia. And I'm so sorry that the editing geek in me came out so strongly. In other words, I like it. :)

Jocelyn said...

No need to appologize for any editting geekiness! We all have strengths. Mine, unfortunately, do not lie in spelling or editing, for that matter.

Michael said...

Not only does your tag line convey your intent grammatically, your effective use of verbs and adverbs make it clear that you are not having difficulty with loving life...just with minding your own business. But who said that minding one's own business is a virtue? There is value is reaching out and being a part of what is going on around you.

Jack Turner said...

I also suffer from "editting geekiness," but it looks like I'm in good company. Unfortunately, most of the people to whom I give unsolicited grammatical advice have given me negative emotional feedback, so I've learned to be more judicious about when I should mind my own business ;-)
(Parenthetically, Jocelyn's strength may not lie in spelling or editing, but it does lie in identifying pride. lol.)